I meant to answer earlier, but the afternoon disappeared on me and I only just sat down again.
I checked the notes from yesterday and I still think the simpler plan makes the most sense, mostly because it gives everyone enough room to adjust without adding extra steps.
I can help pull things together if needed, and I do not mind taking the first pass so the group has something concrete to react to.
I would keep the outline short, point out the one or two parts that actually need attention, and leave the rest for a later pass when people have more time.
If that works for you, send me the latest version and I will review it tonight.
If not, I can still join tomorrow and talk it through live because sometimes that is faster than sending long messages back and forth for hours.

I looked over everything this morning, and I actually think we are closer than it seemed yesterday.
The main issue is not the overall direction, it is just that a few details are still competing with one another and making the outcome feel less settled than it really is.
I can reorganize the order so the opening feels smoother and the ending lands with more confidence.
I would also trim a couple of repetitive lines because they slow the pace and dilute the parts that are already working well.
If you want, I can send a cleaner version first and then we can compare it side by side instead of debating it in the abstract.
That usually makes the decision much easier, and it keeps everyone focused on what actually changed rather than what they imagine might change.