I looked over the draft this morning and I think the simplest approach will work best.
When I tried adding too many details, it started to feel crowded and harder to follow, so I pulled it back to the basics.
I can send the cleaner version later today if that helps, and then we can decide whether anything important is still missing.
I also remembered your note about keeping the tone friendly, which makes sense because the earlier version felt a little too stiff.
I am fine handling the final pass on my side once I hear back from you.
If you are still unsure about the wording, I can give two alternatives that are close in meaning but read more naturally.
I will be around this afternoon, so a quick reply whenever you have a minute is perfectly fine.
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I heard what you were saying, and I agree that it is easier to make progress when the steps are small and clear.
Yesterday I finally sorted through the clutter on my desk, and it made the whole afternoon feel less scattered.
I kept only the notes I actually needed, put the rest away, and then the next task did not feel so annoying.
I think that is probably the way to go here too, just start with the most obvious piece and leave the fine tuning for later.
I am not expecting everything to be perfect on the first pass, and honestly I would rather have something straightforward than something overworked.
If you send what you have, I can take a look and point out anything that feels awkward.
I should have a bit of time this evening, so the timing works well on my side.
Let me know when you are ready.